My epic, "Aphrodite"

This must have taken a lot of work. Kudos.

I like it! So, this is from who's point of view, an on-looker? Or the man who's heart she broke? It sounds like it could be both...

Also, just makin' sure I got this right... It's about a couple who decide to make love for the first time, and he finds out she isn't a virgin? Or he finds out she is cheating on him during that time... And then, he leaves her and basically tries to rebuild or mend his heart as she continues on seemingly unaffected. Then [The Narrator] goes on to assume the other guy doesn't know, (and I'm assuming the reader is meant to assume he doesn't... but I personally never believe that...) but he feels bad for him, for when he finds out he may love this woman, she isn't as faithful as she tries to appear, and he hopes that he sees through her deception, thus leaving the 3 broken hearts... I don't know why her brother had to die, but yeah, screw that bastage too! LOL! But then it ends with him saying that she may still be saved? somehow?

Yeah... maybe I read it wrong... it IS about midnight... But it sounds like it was written long ago. Like, the use of God in it makes it seem like it was written when God actually meant something to people... Not that he doesn't now-adays, he just doesn't have the same presence that he used to... x_x I'm not tryin' to diss the religion or nothing, so if it sounds like that, sorry...

Good interpretation. Close but not quite.

The narrator and Aphrodite fall in love and, after a year and a few days make love for the first time. Almost a year and a half later, she leaves him for the thief. She hurt his heart until his wishing death. Then, in the end, her new lover, her old lover and her brother die and she kills herself in the end because she choose herself over love and others.

True story until the prophecy begins.

Also, she may be saved. But she'll never have either lovers again. She must choose neither to live.

This must have taken a lot of work. Kudos.

Actually, I wrote part I-IV in the space of two hours. I used my ipod because I didn't wish to get it out, so I could've finished quicker if I had.