Of all my Friends

I really enjoy people telling me they like my stuff, and corrections are welcome. The obvious stuff is first on my list and the small stuff is after I finish the complete chapters.

One thing: I did write about the part where the driveway leads. That is where "Jason" trips and injures himself. "The driveway leads..." Just an error in writing. I took out a selection that sucked and forgot to fix it.

Please, more corrections and comments.

I should have the end of chapter 2 and the start of chapter 3 up friday...

If there is any corrections please, tell me and I will fix it.

Keep it coming Wed.

Which Friday btw?? There's lots of Fridays...next Friday? Last Friday? Firday after Friday??

I look forward to it.

Firday

It was supposed to be the 29th, but I got sidetracked by family.

I'm almost into chapter 3 and my perverted meter went up.

EDIT: Kaneda, I would like to know what you think of the rest of it.

How's it coming along now?

I can see you hovering about...

Get the next bit up! I have nothing interesting at all to read! This left me wanting to read the next bit...please!!

It doesn't matter whether you're halfway through a word, just get up the next bit...you're well over the 29th btw...

You're well over the 29th btw...

Yeah... I know... I started school yesterday...

So here's the end of Chapter 2...

And could a moderator change the name of the thread to "Of all my Friends" ? please?

And if no one will lenny, you find someone who will...

And could a moderator change the name of the thread to "Of all my Friends" ? please?

Done.

School already?!

Sorry to hear that.

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I've finally come to parts that are new for me......

“Hey, can I hit that?” I ask point at her Dr. Pepper.

“Kill it.” She says tossing the bottle to me.

...tell a lie, what exactly is Lemon scene? I had never heard of it until I read this.

You've still got to explain how you hurt your leg:

The driveway leads

And Chapter 2 is repeated (you've got half of Chapter 2 before it starting again (Chapter 2 that is)).



I usually hate books written about real life etc...and ones in 1st person (picky little sod...) but this is one that I'd definitely buy if you succeed in getting it published.

One thing I keep on taking for granted is how over here we're legally allowed to drink at 18. Which usually means if you drive, then you can drink as well. Yet you guys (or at least the majority of you. It is 18 in a few states isn't it?) can't drink legally until 21.

Out of interest, at what age can you guys learn to drive as well? Is it 17?


A great read. Keep it up Wed!!