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Poem, Comment ASAP
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Posted 2004-06-20, 12:51 AM in reply to
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"Poem, Comment ASAP"
I'm not sure that "strain" is the correct term when referring to hair. "Strand" would probably be more appropriate, or "thread" or something to that extent.
Either way, it's nice. Maybe try adding another stanza, it's a bit short, which sort of demeans the importance of this strand of hair. A person would read it and go "okay, so she shed on your stuff....so what?"
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