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Posted 2004-03-16, 08:54 PM
in reply to Jessifer's post starting "As I had told you before, I really..."
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Jessifer said:
As I had told you before, I really don't consider myself to be a poet, but since you tend to insist that I am and asked for my opinion on your poem, I'll comply.
Is this your first poem? If so, it actually is rather good, IMHO. The rhyming was nicely done. However, the last line, I think, needs to be re-phrased. It's just my opinion, and you don't have to agree with me, but it seems...I dunno...out of place? Almost as if you're demanding a response from her.
But it still is pretty good. O.o
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I do want a response from her.If she wrote a poem as a reply it would make it even better.
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