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Mydogisyourdog 2003-12-22 05:58 PM

it started
 
this is my first attempt to ever write. dont be too harsh.

It started when i met you,
when i fell for those eyes of blue.
It started when i had you,
when i felt love i never knew.
It started when i lost you,
when my anger grew
It start when i forgot you,
when my heart broke in two.

Hades-Knight 2003-12-22 06:08 PM

WOW!!! thats impressive for first time!!! good job

vec 2003-12-22 11:52 PM

yesh, gj. i don't know how to comment on poetry or anything, but gj.

Chruser 2003-12-23 01:49 AM

Always check poetry and literature for incorrect grammar and typos. Nevertheless, it's a rather good poem for being a first-time writer, although I personally think the broken heart theme has been outdone already.

Jessifer 2003-12-23 10:05 AM

This was only your first time? I'm pleasantly suprised. It's a wonderful poem. Keep it up. ;)

sheerx 2003-12-26 01:28 PM

the obvious mood of this thread is correct.
Was pretty good for a first time poem
yet to write my first poem so your better off than me =)
gj


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