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Fate is a Whore
Fate is a whore
To cause pain, that is what it exists for. I would rather go insane So my mind could get off the pain Through the darkness I try to see I see fate's cold eyes staring back at me. A smirk of pure evil across its face Any pitty there wasn't a trace Its evil intentions clearly shows And the pain in my heart grows The pain I just want to cease To die and be at peace I hear it laughing....what is it laughing for? It laughs at my attempts to find the door It laughs at the fact that I haven't a clue what to do Behind the door, what will I find? Happiness, joy, a peaceful state of mind? Or does only more pain lurk, waiting for me? To torture me for another century? Fate is a whore It wants more pain, more suffering more! There is no denying it. There is no defying it. We must find the door What for? Freedom from our cruel fate Isn't that worth suffering for? We must search, long and hard And at the end, we may be horribly scarred But we might be free That day....I long to see. So fight! Emerge into the light! Or jump and obey fate's bark... And sink into eternal dark... |
Don't try so hard to make everything rhyme. When you do that, it blows the flow off.
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Yeah I know. But unrhyming poems sound so awful. Whereas rhyming have a certain coolness about them.
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But your rhymes aren't good... so what's the point of rhyming if it doesn't sound good?
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My favorite rhyme is "go fuck a duck" Take my advice.
Sorry, I hate criticism. |
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Actually, I didn't think that this poem was very bad. In fact, I kinda liked it. I admit though, some lines did seem rather forced.
Keep it up, I say. |
I doubt he wrote it.
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